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For as long as Trav Ford has known the Sanders boys, one name has haunted the entire band. Their first lead guitarist and Mackey’s first lover has left a stamp on the kids he’s known as family, and now Grant has one last chance to hurt the people Trav cares for the most.
Except Grant isn’t the monster Trav made him out to be, and coming home is harder on the band—and Trav—than he ever could have anticipated. When Trav is confronted with the reality of what Mackey and his brothers left behind—and with what they’re about to lose—he has to seriously reconsider if he’s strong enough to deal with everything that Mackey and Outbreak Monkey have come to represent. Fortunately for Trav, Mackey’s learned a lot in the past year, and one of his best lessons is how to hold on to the people he loves.
I’m trying not to be pissy here.
It’s not working.
What in the everluvinworld happened?
Okay, I’m going to start with my biggest beef…the timing. The conclusion of each ‘part’ has been pivotal thus far; sometimes leaving you hanging by a thread and others agitated but satisfied. This particular segment was poorly sectioned. It wasn’t enough (sixty-six percent? Come on!) and it felt incomplete.
Which of course, it is incomplete, but it was….not enough.
Next, characters were out of character. Trav is not the ‘tuck tail and run’ kind of guy. I don’t buy it for a minute. He would NOT leave Mackey during such a vulnerable time.
Nope. I see him fighting till he’s bloody and can’t throw another punch. I was upset and disappointed in him. *scowls* Don’t let me down Trav.
Third, the dialogue was wacky and had some mistakes scattered throughout. It was disorderly and did not flow well. Maybe massive cuts were done as well? I felt holes and some big enough that I almost fell in.
Finally, extra angst was tossed in unnecessarily. As if some added ‘wow factor’ was needed and frankly, it wasn’t. There’s been enough bloodshed; I could have done without Cheever and his stupidity. Things felt too fast for Grant. I am aware that cancer strikes randomly and rapidly, but I was as if someone hit the fast forward button on his critical heartbreaking return. The comment about ‘seeing you as a couple’ and the kiss was…maddening. I cannot imagine facing your demons and realizing they weren’t demons after all, but I didn’t think it was executed properly.
There was no balance.
It was too short.
It was out of tune.
I wanna go back to my happy place.
Part six was not a happy place and now the pressure has been amped up….this next (final) part is going to make it or break it.
Please please please….blow me away.
Title: Beneath the Stain Pt 6
Author: Amy Lane
Publisher: Dreamspinner Press
Release Date: October 3, 2014
Purchase Links: Dreamspinner